
One of my favorite scenes in In Over Her Head is when Erica Peck, a terrified-of-the-ocean marina owner wakes up under the sea on a soggy mattress with a starfish as a pillow. She remembers being on the wrong end of the gun, in the ocean, with a shark in the water. After that... nothing. So when she wakes up under the sea she thinks she's died and gone to Hell. Or has the bends. Or something. Because humans cannot be under the sea without a scuba tank and live to tell about it, right?
Wrong.
The thing with this scene is, I am as scared of the ocean as Erica was (I saw JAWS at an early age and it left a mark). It's an irrational fear, and I know it, but I can't help it. So, I decided to use it. I put myself in Erica's place and went with it. What would I notice? What would I think? How would I feel about it? What would happen when I found out I wasn't dead. Then I poured all of that "omg!" and ick factor and disbelief into Erica and this is what I came up with:
Erica sat up, pushed off the mattress, and stood. Or actually, floated to a standing position. Floated? Her hair billowed around her like seaweed on the beach after a hurricane, and she brushed it back.
But it drifted forward again.
She really was in water. But how was that possible? She was breathing...
... Breathing?
People couldn't breathe underwater.
She held her hand up to her face. Little puffs exited her nose, but they weren't puffs of air. They were... water...
She was inhaling water?
Panic set in. She was taking in water. She was going to drown. People couldn't suck water into their lungs and expect to live. This was insane.
Erica clamped her hand over her mouth, held her breath, and looked around. There had to be a way out of this place. Preferably up.
She looked up. A ceiling. No hole. Great.
There was a door on one side and a porthole on the other. She swam to the porthole, but the latch was rusted in place, so she one-handed doggy-paddled over to the door and peered out. A long, dark corridor that went... downward.
Her chest hitched. She needed air. Now.
Swimming into that darkness was the last thing she wanted to do. Well, the last thing before drowning, that was. That didn't leave her many choices.
Swallowing her fear and the rest of the water that'd been in her mouth when she'd clamped it shut, Erica swam into the corridor.
A dozen feet in, visibility faded to shadows, and her lungs started protesting.
Another five feet and her nerves were shot.
If she was going to drown, she didn't want to do it in the dark.
Doing a front flip that would've made her swim-team coach proud, Erica returned to the room. Soon to be her mausoleum, apparently. Her brothers would never find her now.
But wait. Wasn't she already dead? In Hell already? Her lungs were burning, so, yeah, that was a possibility. But Hell was supposed to be engulfed in flames yet this water was comfortably warm.
She sat on the edge of the soggy mattress and fought with her lungs. They could keep quiet a bit longer while she tried to figure this out.
No, they couldn't.
And they wouldn't.
Instincts humming, Erica found her brain wouldn't cooperate with her lungs, and all of a sudden, she was choking.
Choking and gulping.
Choking and gulping and... breathing?
And then she was screaming.
Ohmygodohmygodohmygod...
How did one suck in enough water to drown a flotilla yet keep breathing?
She screamed again, slithering to the sandy floor as her backbone turned to jelly. But if you scream in hell-water and there's no one around to hear you, does that make you insane?
Or a fish?
Was this some hideous cosmic joke? You turned into what killed you? How would one turn into, say, a crumbling building? A burning car? plane crash?
She hiked herself back onto the bed. Maybe, just maybe, God was kind and she had somehow survived the shark, drifted to the surface, and was merely suffering from the bends. Once her body got the proper oxygen and nitrogen percentages worked out, she'd wake up from this air-deprivation-induced coma with its ridiculous hallucinations.
Yes, that was it. That was what she'd cling to. This delusion was her body's reaction to th e bends. It all made sense. She just needed to be patient. Once her chemistry was back to normal, she'd be back to normal. Stuck four-and-a-half miles from shore in shark-infested waters... but, hey, she could manage that.
And the hallucinations weren't all that bad. Water-breathing lungs, so what? They were doable. Talking starfish, glowing fish lamps? Odd, but interesting.
Yep, she would just sit back and let her body get back to normal. She'd be just fine.
And then a naked man swam into the room.
The thing is, I used to LOVE the ocean. My family has been going down the shore (a pure South Jersey expression for going to the beach) since I was young. I used to swim out past where the waves break, back and forth, floating on my back for hours and my mom and I would float on rafts reading books for hours. Or a bunch of us would link our rafts and chat about whatever it is young girls chat about. It was fun.
Then, along came "the movie." Sigh. I begged to go see it, and Mom, against her better judgment took me. I remember watching it upside down with my ears covered. Oh, how I wish I hadn't begged.
I do take my family down the shore. Like I said, it's an irrational fear. I try to talk myself around it. I do go on the beach, I even go in the water. Last year I was in for a whole 45 minutes boogie-boarding, until my "shark meter" ratcheted up to throat level and I had to get out. I was proud of those 45 minutes. Like I said, it's irrational. And I know it. And I can play mind games with myself to sort-of overcome it because we love our annual vacation to Ocean City.
We love the boardwalk and going on the rides. The Double Shot is a favorite addition in recent years. The Wild Mouse was the first roller coaster I can ever remember riding and I had a blast taking my kids on it their first time. The water park, miniature golf and getting henna tattoos. Then of course there's Mack & Manco's pizza and Shriver's salt water taffy and Steel's fudge. Who can forget the fudge? Especially the samples they hand out at night. Frozen custard, lemonade, soft-serve ice cream, funnel cake and cotton candy. And, of course, one of my favorite haunts (well, two since they have two locations): the Atlantic Book Shop.
Ocean City has changed over the years, but not so much as to alter its charm. You can still get a great breakfast at The Chatterbox, or donuts on the boards during our morning bike ride. Dinner at Obidiah's or pizza delivery. Because Ocean City is such a great destination, I, in conjunction with the Atlantis Inn B&B in Ocean City (www.AtlantisInn.com), am offering a chance to win one of two OC beach getaway weekends - as well as another weekend at the Hibiscus House (www.HibiscusHouse.com) in West Palm Beach Florida. All information is on my website at: www.JudiFennell.com

About The Author:
Judi Fennell has had her nose in a book and her head in some celestial realm all her life, including those early years when her mom would exhort her to "get outside!" instead of watching Bewitched or I Dream of Jeannie on television. So she did--right into Dad's hammock with her Nancy Drew books.
These days she's more likely to have her nose in her laptop and her head (and the rest of her body) at her favorite bookstore, but she's still reading, whether it be her latest manuscript or friends' books.
A three-time finalist in online contests, Judi has enjoyed the reader feedback she's received and would love to hear what you think about her Mer series. Check out her website at www.JudiFennell.com for excerpts, reviews and fun pictures from reader and writer conferences, and the chance to "dive in" to her stories.
Leave a comment/question for Judi and your email addy and you'll be entered to have a chance at winning a copy of In Over Her Head. There will be one winner and contest is only open to those in the US and Canada.
35 comments:
I loved the exceprt and my curiosity is so piqued that now I'm going to have to read and find out what happened to her. I love it.
I know I would panic if I woke up underwater. I have a fear of drowning, due to an incident when I was a teenager.
I just spotted this book the other day on Amazon! It sounds like a great new series. I have it on my list to look for at the store.
I have heard great things about this book throughout blogland - definitely wanting to read this one.
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Loved the excerpt. I'm not a big fan of the water but not because of sharks. It was an incident of me almost drowning when I was about 10. I'd love to see how she deals with being underwater all the time. Have a great day.
house_mouse88 at yahoo dot com
Ever since I saw this on another blog back in January, I've wanted to read it :)
jaam121388 at yahoo dot com
Hi Judi and Terra! *waving*
I've heard nothing but great things about 'In Over Her Head' and I would love to win a copy! It on my TBR list.
Thanks for making my mouth water again!
Dottie :)
omg that sounds like an excellent. I am adding this to my wish at amazon. Never heard of this author or book but loved that excerpt.
I first became aware of Judi and In Over Her Head when we were both contestants at Gather's First Chapters Romance contest. I enjoyed it then and I still am eager to read it. I'm so thrilled for Judi and her success.
Margay
I would like to read this
bjhopper(at)me(dot)com
What an interesting excerpt. I've heard wonders about this book. Please count me in.
*waving hi
Thanks everyone for saying such nice things about my story. I had such a blast writing it and I hope you do reading it!
Thanks, Terra!!! for having me!
Great excerpt and great comments here too! I'm keeping an eye out for this one.
Judi, I love the excerpt as a whole, and what a fab last line!
Congratulations on IN OVER HER HEAD! I hope to have it in my hot little hands soon!
Light,
Nancy Haddock
nancy@nancyhaddock.com
Hi Judi! That fascinating excerpt plus Terra's enthusiastic rating have me anxious to get my hands on this book! How many books will be in the series?
pjpuppymom[at]yahoo[dot]com
Hi Judi, I've been wanting to read this since I first found your site, and I see Terra's highly recommending it. Have it on the mail to me now, hope it shows up tomorrow. One of these summers I need to visit Ocean City, usually I end up at the shore in Rhode Island.
"And then a naked man swam into the room." Yah, I can see where this would blow her mind, lol! Good excerpt, Judi. I like how you explained writing it from the POV of a person terrified of the water. You can actually feel her panic and disbelief.
I like Ocean City, we used to go there too and Virginia Beach.
Wishing you much success with this series! I can't wait to read them all.
Since I first heard of this book, I've had it on my wishlist. I would so love to win and read this one. Congratulations on "In Over Her Heads" release and I hope to see many more books from you since I can tell just from the excerpt that I'm going to love the book and be a big fan of yours.
My questions for you:
Are you the first author in your family?
And when you write, do you have a plan in mind as to what to write for each chapter of your book or do you just write and let it come to you as your fingers fly over the keyboard?
Good morning! It's so exciting to see so many people here - and to "hear" the enthusiasm. Thank you all so much!
To answer your questions:
PJ - as to how many are in the series, well, I'm not sure. It's a big ocean out there; there are lots of fish in the sea. I've set up the world with a ruling hierarchy in each ocean, so, conceivably it could go on for a long time. I have ideas for the next few books, but I've also got another series in mind that my editor is excited about. ONce I finish edits on the 3rd book, I'll put together proposals and we'll see where we go from there.
LadyVampire2u - I am the first published author in my immediate family, although my mom can definitely write. She just never had the (fill in your own word: nerve, craziness, whatever) to sit down and do it. One of my children is showing a great talent and has already had something published in a children's magazine, so we'll see. I do have extended family who have published in non-fiction, but more industry-specific type things.
As for how I write: I'm a pantzer, meaning I write by the seat of my pants. I just start writing and see where the story takes me. I usually have some idea where we're going, but not all the time. And the characters don't always take me where I'd thought we were going. This happened with Catch of a Lifetime. We went off in a totally different direction, to the point that the bad guy changed and the original bad guy disappeared from the story. I love when that happens!
I'll check back in later, as I'm on major deadline to finish these edits.
Sounds like a great book.
Please include me in the giveaway
thank you
elaing8(at)netscape(dot)net
I've been hearing alot about this one, sounds great!
Oh My God, this sounds so interesting. I am usually not one that reads stuff like this, but this excerpt has me hooked. Great job.
alix.n.taylor@gmail.com
Great excerpt, I am intrigued by this book. It sounds different and I like different! I think I would freak if I woke up under water. I would love to read this one!
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Look at all your buzz!!! Buzzzzzz.
I am a fish - I pretty much knew how to swim before I could walk, aided and abetted by my mother's complete inability to swim. She was determined that we would not share her fate. That said, as much as I love the ocean and for all the great times I have had down the Jersey shore, I still get easily squeed out by the trappings of the ocean - seaweed, creatures, water worms, the works. It's a contradiction, I know.
Headed to the pool today on my vaca and am planning to break the spine on IOHH. Can't wait! Congrats!
Judi Fennell is one of my favorite authors and I take credit for discovering her, LOL! Your fear of water comes through so clearly in that scene, you made it real for all of us. Way to go, girl friend!!!
Hugs to ya and best of luck with In Over Her Head
Thanks everyone! I'm finding more and more people willing to own up to the JAWS phenomenon! LOL
And, yes, Maggie, you can make that claim - just like I claim finding you! You helped me get where I am today!
Great excerpt!
I'd love to win a copy of In Over Her Head.
marieimy (at) gmail (dot) com
I have an irrational fear of being under water too, thanks to my older sister's several attempts at drowning me as a child.
The excerpt was awesome. I want more! I enjoy reading about mer-people.
I have this strange fear of drowning when my car ends up in deep water -- I have no idea why though!
The book sounds great!
marielay@gmail.com
this series sounds really interesting, and i'm always drawn to any story that contains humor!
did you have to keep resisting the format of 'classic' merpeople stories, or did this story just unfold on its own without influence from the well-known stories?
M.: I pulled on a lot of things: mythology and popular perceptions - then put my own spin on it. I had a blast playing with this world, these characters and the story, as well as mythology and legends and pop culture. I just put whatever I wanted in there and got to keep most of it.
This is not a typical book I would pick up, but it has gotten good reviews. I would love to give it a try!
I like being in water, but I don't swim as much as I should. Summer is coming up though, so hopefully that will soon change.
Great excerpt!
I'm claustrophobic so I don't think I'd enjoy waking up under the sea at all! Just the thought of it freaks me out. Though, I might make an exception if all the sea creatures started to sing and dance a la The Little Mermaid...
un_pissenlit (at) hotmail (dot) com
I couldn't handle waking up under the sea for many reasons, claustrophobia being the main one. It would be interesting reading how Erica adapted to her new situation.
Thanks!
megalon22[at]yahoo[dot]com
I have an irrational fear of heights. So I completely understand. It is awesome how your irrational fear of water spark such an interesting novel. I cannot wait to read it.
Sue
okibi_insanity[at]yahoo[dot]com
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